Your caustic words strip my
painted mask away
acid tears leak, scarring
marring my flesh.
But I want you to know who I am.
Your hard, uncaring hands
force my body to yeild,
bruises stain my shrinking skin
aching with broken promises.
But I want you to know who I am.
Your frozen eyes see through my
carefully designed walls
deep into my flawed soul,
they rove like invading armies.
But I want you to know who I am.
Your brutality threatens my sanity,
fragile already, it cracks under your
unyeilding intensity, I can no longer hide
my sins, you smile grimly, and I cry.
But I want you to know who I am.
You kiss the tears from my cheeks,
whispered words of hate and adoration
tumble through my shuddering mind
I don't want to love you,
But I want you to know who I am.
Author notes
quote prompt: "I'd rather hate you for everything you are, then ever love you for something you are not."-Never Enough by Five Finger Death Punch.
A contest entry
- Quote Prompt PW allowed by Xmas16.
370 points, ended August 17, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver into GOLD pt 7 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended September 20, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is very well penned. all your stuff is
i love the opening stanza
Your caustic words strip my
painted mask away
acid tears leak, scarring
marring my flesh.
But I want you to know who I am.
such graceful flow throuighout this piece i can totally see where it deserved its silver and to be made a gold too
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Thanks I'm glad you liked
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You did a good job with that prompt, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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A beautiful, well-written composition!
Congratulations on the Silver Award
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I very much liked this write. I liked the repeating lines at the end of each stanza. Very nice take on the prompt. Simply put, GREAT JOB!
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Words Sometimes Fail,
to speak to the occasion. Simply put, WOW!!!
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