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Blazoning Le Mat

Missing image

I and only I have broken out

of the busy-ness of the Majors

with their deep import

 

my way takes me through

a sable Alhambra of pines

marron-floor my path until

the dark columns give way

to haphazard birches

young and argent then beyond

endored cornfields and vert grasses

the open-eyed sky

 

my footfall firm and foolish

not because this terrier

tears from my azure hose

per-party-pile my proper flesh

I go because that’s what I do

 

my doublet of silly gules

belted per-party-fess and

with couped sleeves of or

the whole world’s in my gaze

and yet it’s meagre value

is my scrip and staff

 

my sister counter-faced La Mort

she reaps and sweeps clean

the ordinaries and divisions of the field

the chevronel furrows delved

and bare to accept new growth

 

my role’s to be therefrom

the setter-up of tiny miracles

a random John-Barleycorn

in Fate’s boundless acres

 

and not for nothing

are we called arcane

 

 

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  • Cynewulf
    August 15, 2008

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    well, as a student of the Tarot for 20 years I can appreciate this on many levels. It was well worth a gold. I figured it would be a contest by Amazira. He writes some really good mystical stuff. Great imagery & fine structure. I really like this, excellent. I also love that avatar you use.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      August 15, 2008
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      Thank you. I have a small list of poetry etc concerning the Tarot, with more planned (dependent on Amazira's contests); please feel free to browse.


  • maa gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    heartfelt congrats on the gold, mairi !
    I am only discovering your freeverse poetry, and I must admit that you masterfully play with this form as well ... I wouldn't expect less from you ...
    your message here transcends cliché et tradition, that's exactly what I like ...
    thank you for your symbolic diamond-trophy, it means a lot to me coming from you ...
    see you in the next round,
    maa


  • MyrddinEmrys silver member
    August 5, 2008
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    A well desereved cup indeed! Congratulations!

    Myrddin Emrys


  • omanixax
    August 5, 2008
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    yep yep

    definitely gold worthy - cheers everyone! looking forward to the next


  • Dark Otter
    August 5, 2008

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    Got it!

    The finish fills the missing piece. Fertile fields, John Barleycorn and the planting of the seeds. The fool is the planter of tomorrow's reality with the decisions he makes in the day. I see, some of your 'gestalt' and I see 'you' in this. Thanks Mairi!

  • Dark Otter
    August 5, 2008
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    Howdy!

    This is worth multiple reads. Not what I expected, Mon ami. I expected the rich language, strong visuals and keen insight. I was expecting a different form from you. Your prose is worth a study as is the subtlety that you use. I'm getting my dictionary before a full comment.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      You're disappointed?

      If I have to explain this poem to you, then I will know I have failed.


  • Gold Hat
    August 4, 2008
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    Vivid writing. Where are all the comments from your admirers?

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