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Will You Give Me A Sign?

No, I don't know where I'm going
No, I don't know who I am
Things have changed so quickly
I'm unable to understand

Lies, depair and bitter betrayal
Always seemed close to me
God you have to show me a way

Whether it's You
Or someone to guide me through these tainted nights
There has to be "something"
To make things right

If it may be guidance
Or a sign from above
Show me hope of non desperation
Within my helpless love

Author notes

Sorry, I used a few, I guess in a sence. 2.Guard 3.Guide and 5.God

I have been on writer's block for a while, and I am trying to get on the right track. I knoqw it might have been a bit forced, and I know you like free verse ... I would have tried different, but it just didnt come out that way. I hope you enjoyed your contest.

A contest entry

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  • PaintedParisPassion gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    This is amazing. I havent read something from you in a lonnnnng time! but really thought, i loved the whole g thing, but overall it flowed really really well. :]

    -B


  • Pandorea
    August 3, 2008

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    oh that's sad. hope you've gotten out of your writer's block...it's horrible, i know.

    thnkas for entering.

  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    First of all, I LOVE the answer without the question. Brilliant dear. I just think that it's simple yet contains a complicated issue. You're screaming for help without really screaming, and the way you've worded it gives it that air of sophisticated-ness even though I'm sure you feel much less than that.
    The rhyming is a bit iffy, and truth is it probably would have been better as a free verse but as you said, it just came out that way and a lot of the time (in my opinion) when things are messed with too much, it takes away the truth and real emotions behind it.
    I wish you the best of luck in the contest, if it hasn't already been judged.
    Although it may not be considered a classic or whatever, it's still a great write.
    And God knows, I'm not the only who can relate.

    Ily hun.