i cant feel mii mind
wondering again
into were i dont know
and dunon if ill ever get home
im so sick of the sence
when can i take a break from all this pain.
going threw mii veins
as i get weaker everyday
wiping the tears as they drip down mii face
cutting for every mistake ive made.
or was my whole life just a mistake?
hating the thought of hatetrid.
hating the thought of suicide
but hating everything.
but as i slide gently on mii floor
taking the last cut
thats taking it all
my life, and mii pain.
all the sorrow and saddness filling the air
as the thought of there loved one
taking there life
as they say there last words
''We love yooh''
as i took mii last breath.
Author notes
notthe best one i written.but i thought it was okay.
A contest entry
- Hello Writers by luna-midnight.
1000 points, ended August 3, 2008, 22 entries
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525 points, ended September 24, 2008, 104 entries
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Comments
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really good write.
I would just like to point out instead of mii you may put "my"
and your typo for dunon. I believe you meant "dunno"..here to you could have put "don't know"
None the less great write -
awww this is sad, and very pain filled, thanks for entering and good luck, and i do hope you are okay *Hugs*
Stephanie ♥
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