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The Watcher

Her heart has withered over time;

broken in a crash of dreams,

losing the ability to trust

or repair itself it seems.

 

She hides behind a lens.

It’s her emotional shield,

viewing life’s intensity

in each diabolical event revealed.

 

Through the lens of the camera,

colored by her pain,

she captures tender moments

which her mind cannot explain.

 

And so she hides, protected,

in a celluloid cocoon

becoming a catastrophic casualty

as she sings her lonely tune.

 

Pictures hanging on a wall,

the beauty there denied.

Life’s colors and emotions stripped;

she’s black and white inside.

 

Author notes

Prompt: Word Bank and Picture
Picture Credit: www.photobucket.com
No limit

Word Bank (must use 8 minimum)
broken
withered
crash
intense
emotional
tender
becoming
losing
demonic
diabolical
catastrophic

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    in each diabolical event revealed. this is the only clumsey line to me. Every line is perfect and the poem as a whole is superb! Thank you for entering this was excellent


  • Angelflower
    August 13, 2008

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    I really really liked this.. you did such a wonderful job!! it had intense emotion in this write and there was just... well i just really liked this piece..Lol. thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck..



    Angel


  • Shadow Lynx
    August 9, 2008

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    Brilliant!!

    One of the best efforts with a word bank i think i have read , amazing ! well done


    • KayJay
      August 9, 2008
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      I'm honored you think so... I'm a rhymer by instinct so I typically avoid word banks... but this one worked out. Thank you for the kind comment and the read...
      Ken


  • shecantstopfalling.
    August 7, 2008
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    This is great! The rhyming isnt one bit forced and the rhythm is great! nice write!


  • jackreed3 gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    nice work ken... great style.... JackReed3....


  • Lucy.
    August 3, 2008

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    Very clever poem fitting within these guidelines. I love 'celluloid cocoon' and fantastic last lines. Well done.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    WOW.. this is fantastic. I love how you used the words. this poem reads very smoothly.. I love the last stanza the most. especially the last 2 lines.

    good luck in the contest my lover


    kat

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