Has it been a lifetime
since last I saw you?
Your smile is there
But you’re not
I see a shadow
Nobody is casting it.
I feel your presence
But you’re not.
I know why your gone
I can’t accept it
You should be there
But you’re not.
They told me it will be alright
my heart feels shattered
Eyes sockets are empty of tears
I know you’re not there
I hold that look in my heart
One from across the room
I keep looking over there
But you’re not…
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Oh my this beautifully sad...
Love the imagery and flow.Tis in exellent form indeed, a very enjoyable read.thanks for sharing your poetic heart.
Be blessed in all you ever do.
Tony
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i know that the title of this piece is 'but you're not' but i felt that the repetition of that line was unnecessary. also you repeated it in every stanza but one which seemed strange
otherwise this was a nice piece goodluck in the contest
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Flowy and Nice.
I like how the whole poem just continously flowed like wind. It made the poem have more feeling and depth!
I hold that look in my heart
One from across the room
I keep looking over there
But you’re not…
Wow! Wonderful stanza!! Great job and good luck!
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What a great write.. well done... it just flowed along, easy read..
Plus you captured my exact state of mind recently... well done.
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sad...
i love you gran -
Aww!! This was so sad. Very well written though. I could really feel the pain in your words. I really hope it is not personal
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BEAUTIFULLY SAD
your tender words flow like the sweetest love song...a slow soft beat...I know your feelings very well! niaish for sharing them with me and for entering
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