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Flesh and Blood

Flesh and blood.

Expendable tools and nothing more.

Living weapons whose purpose is to

Mechanically follow orders,

Even if it costs them their wretched lives.

Finite, they march on,

Unaware (or uncaring?) of the fate that awaits them.

--

Flesh and blood,

Both spilled on the battle field.

Moans of pain suffocate as the damned soldiers curse their gods.

The soil complains of the taste of blood.

Entrails lie stinking in the heat of the midday sun,

As flies gather to feast.

--

Flesh and blood

The families of the lost

Weep bitterly when they realize he is not coming home.

Unapologetic apathy,

Striking a hard blow to their hearts,

Surrounds them and looks down on them with irritated heartlessness.

--

Flesh and blood,

They are no longer.

They spitefully shake their ghostly fists at God.

The flames and fire that raze them eternally

Do not scorch and burn as much as the forever chilling ice

That rips their skin from their bones time and time again.

--

 “Why must we be punished for doing as we were told,”

They scream. “Why did we have to pay with our

Flesh and blood?”

--

 The worms and flies whisper in delight,

“How delicious are these fools’

Flesh and blood!”

--

The wives and children cry,

“Who has taken from us our own

Flesh and blood?”

--

The precious materials that allow our hearts to beat they gave,

But at what cost?

No one cares for the poor fools who died,

For they were merely

Flesh and blood,

Expendable tools and nothing more.

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I absolutely detest war... Enough said.

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  • Ebbing.X.Discreetly
    August 30, 2008

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    An interesting piece about war. Very intruiging.
    My favourite lines:
    "The soil complains of the taste of blood.
    Entrails lie stinking in the heat of the midday sun,
    As flies gather to feast."
    And also
    "For they were merely
    Flesh and blood,
    Expendable tools and nothing more. "

    Great Job...Keep it up!

  • InShadowsEmbrace
    August 14, 2008

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    Another great piece. I detest war as well and have found this poem has described my views on warfare almost perfectly. My favorite line has to be "for they were merely flesh and blood, expendable tools and nothing more" The repeat of the title was also a great idea because it lets the idea of soldiers being nothing but pawns really sink in as you read. I wish I had some constructive criticism to give but I simply found the whole idea and way you presented this work flawless. great work


  • Gibson0918
    August 11, 2008

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    I completely agree with you i believe war is the creation of man which will destroy us
    you went in excellent detail of showing just that


  • humblpye gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Excellent

    piece of work extremely well crafted; paints a vivid and horrifically sad picture of the futilities of war and all it stands for; greed, power and madness; I like the repetitive use of the title, keeps the mind focused on the harsh reality of wasted life
    areally great effort thanks for sharing
    John


  • g r e y i s m
    August 4, 2008

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    A very good analysis of the reality that is war. In the first stanza, last line, I think perhaps something like "Unaware (or uncaring?) of the fate that awaits them" might possibly be changed to "Dulled to the reality of the fate that awaits them" or something along those lines. I actually think there is a more graceful way to say that even, but it escapes me at the moment. Anyway, just something I thought I would throw out there, since it seems you might be undecided for that line.

    I noticed on your page you're from CA. I grew up there until I was 19, in Oceanside. I miss it even now.

    Best wishes,

    Lea

    • OurSolemnHour
      August 5, 2008
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      Thank you so much!

      This is the kind of feedback I love most! I will consider your generous advice. I live in the valley so it's not as exciting as the bay area


  • BabyGurlz
    August 3, 2008

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    Tabatha

    :'( This poem is great i lost a friend to the war so it touched me kept it up babe

    love tabby


    • OurSolemnHour
      August 3, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment. My thoughts are with you and your friend.


  • wvtwinklestar gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    Great Poem

    I really liked this poem..we all close our eyes to their Screams.."Why did we have to pay with our Flesh and blood" I feel for all the ones that crys thats left behind and especially the one that sacrificed their own life,Im sure not all of their own choosing.
    Very Good Write
    Conni

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