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Beneath the brow of beauty's breath.

Peace caught a glimpse
of pure perfection,
as cosmos crowded, just to see

and stars sat staring
upon tree's sighs,
as hope spoke in broken beats.

Movements meandered
with fluidity,
as belief listened
to tilted thoughts
and wilted woes grew weightless-

untied themselves
from weary boughs.

Blood-red regrets blew blue
against the bark of better days
as naivety nurtured nuance...

recollected dreams
so long dispersed

and there amidst such tepid air,
where care had been disturbed
lay unperturbed...a healer's hand-

white buds of wisdom
placed...observed.


Author notes

Picture inspired
Montserrat http://www.thesacredfeminine.com/wvisionaryart.html

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  • Re-invention silver member
    August 7, 2008

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    wow... amazing! nicely use of metaphors darling this is amazing and worth of a thousand merits indeed.! great job!


  • Riamh
    August 7, 2008
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    Terrific! I really enjoyed it. Congratulations!


  • disgrace
    August 7, 2008
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    congrats on the gold! this is amazing


  • Wolf Mancini
    August 7, 2008

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    Wonderful poetry

    Very bright and thoughtfully written.
    I enjoyed this very much.
    Excellent job my friend!

    wolf


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 7, 2008
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    very nice word usage and conveying of imagery
    and also, congrats on the gold


  • Todays Poem Box
    August 7, 2008

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    Congrats you have been nominated for the poem of the day in the group Today's Poem Box.


  • sideways hourglass
    August 4, 2008

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    you are such an amazing writer. the poem just flows with thought and sound. consistent metaphor. precise imagery. this poem is definitely golden.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 4, 2008
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  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    WOW!!!! What an amazing piece.

    your words are outstanding, and the flow is sensational. Excellent take on the pic

    Thank you for entering this beauty into my contest.



    Delila


  • Riamh
    August 3, 2008

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    This did my heart good. I loved it. The opening.....
    Peace caught a glimpse
    of pure perfection,
    as cosmos crowded, just to see.......
    caught my attention and you held it right to the end. I read it aloud on the second reading to hear the words and they were just beautiful!
    Well done and good luck with the contest.


  • Angelflower
    August 3, 2008

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    This was really beautiful.. I must say I reallyloved this.. The imagery was vivid and smooth, and the emotion was wonderful as well.. I really liked the metaphors you used as well theyreally seemed to fit in this piece , thanks much for sharing. best of luck..


    Angel


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    Good

    Wonderful poem very well done, my poet friend
    . most enjoyable a little cryptic to read but
    very well done good imagery I love the closing.
    There were no errors. Or No typos. . I would change. I look forward to your next poem

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