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On The Rise

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It’s a hot and sultry afternoon
and here beneath my tree,
I might have sung a different tune

if you’d been here with me.

The springy grass becomes our bed,
a blanket for a sheet,
cushions where we lay our head,
the earth beneath our feet.

Shielded from the sun’s bright glare
in dappled shade we lie,
golden rays streak through your hair
all nature gives a sigh.

Our fingers move, the slightest touch
sends shivers down our spines,
one look, one smile that says so much,
we’ll read between the lines.

The early evening brings a kiss
and stars put on a show,
the promise of a night of bliss
as passions start to grow.
 
We leave our garden of delight
the moon is on the rise,
to Mother Nature say, “Good Night”,
no more for prying eyes.



 

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Oh so lovely and full of tender feelings and touches of passion. Builds up with a feeling of anticipation to what the night has yet to bring...


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    A perfect poem to read when retiring for Zzzzz's sent me off in the nicest possible way...heaven...
    Moonbumps xxx


  • Legend silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    Never any problem in reading your rhyme, as it always flows so well. a pleasure to read as ever
    Excellent


  • arafura gold member
    August 2, 2008
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    There's a good moon on the rise...


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    Great stuff, your rhyme is just as sharp as your FV today
    great stuff.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 2, 2008
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    Much clapping

    And I can hear mother nature snapping her fingers at another lost tableau.

    Good stuff.

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