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angels and appologies

Wire jawed angels flutter their way around us
Unable to give their advice or voice
Their disgust.

And thus it smokes headily
Your heartfelt apology
And falls trembling
To the ground

Author notes

i don't like the title of this much, but i think it really has some merit
Written January 11th, 2004

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  • s-empiternal
    February 19, 2004
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    Hi thanks for your comments on my work, I really appreciated it. I really like this poem of yours, like the above, I was drawn to it because of the title, though I don't think you should need to explain your work like he/she asked you to. The imagery is quite vivid, you should develop this one further i think!

  • starburn
    January 19, 2004
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    the it is the appology


  • January 11, 2004
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    What drew me to this poem was the title as it goes... I quite enjoyed this poem, although I don't know what the 'it' is... 'it' is such a vague word sometimes.