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Angelic Vision


Vision slid away from crimson bloom.
Angels swore, "Fuck Confession
It's a curse, a plague, no concession
for those laid to rest in the Glory Room."

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Quantumsurveyor used all the words in the bank: Angels
Crimson
Fuck
Glory
Bloom
Confession
Curse
Plague
Laid To Rest
Vision

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  • Rovingone gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Very creative. You can certainly find a unique way to push a lot of different words into on short piece. Well done.


  • arafura
    August 2, 2008
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    Not smooshed at all! Great reading my friend.

  • Asabouros.
    August 2, 2008
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    W00T... I like this, all the words are in one small little thing and it doesn't seem smooshed I do have one little issue with it though...if you don't mind, could you please make the following comma correction?

    "a curse, a plague, no concession"


    Otherwise, I really do like this a lot.


    • quantumsurveyor
      August 2, 2008

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      Thanks, so glad I didn't smoosh it. (smooshed???) How did I miss the punctuation bloops? Thanks for your kindly correction.


      • quantumsurveyor
        August 3, 2008
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        Thank you - world wide web says: "squashed" or "mashed" source is given as one Sy Montgomery, naturalist and writer. Am I impressed? LOL

      • Asabouros.
        August 2, 2008
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        Thanks for fixing it (yes, smooshed)

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