It's dark outside
Two voices whispering to me
I set it down
Clutch my head in my hands
...Thinking...
The scratchy sinister voice entices
While the soft, gentle voice pleads
My decision is made
I pick up the pathetic knife
...Hesitating...
Then it bites me
Making red stripes
Tiny crimson marbles grow
The anger and hurt comes out red
I feel relieved for just a moment
The guilt is almost overpowering
I now realize what I have done
Author notes
Almost 3 months down the drain
Option #2
A contest entry
- Make It Dark by peregrin.
450 points, ended August 10, 2008, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Moving Past The Pain-♥ by Bruised.Roses.
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Comments
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um... I'm not sure where to start... First it's a very well written piece. The topic is one I know well as I have a close friend who used to have the same problem. She has made it 1 year 1 month and 3 daysnow. I'm sorry to hear "Almost 3 months down the drain" but don't give up. you can beat this, aone slip isn't the end. Just pick yourself up and keep going.
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never say down the drain with recovery people make mistakes and that's what it was you need to learn and grow from it. It was a slip and nothing more now you must try to get back up again. amazing entry not what I thought from the title but so beautiful!!!! great work good luck on your recovery as well as in the contest keep writting
xoxo
Tash -
i did like it
and i relate
it is hard trying to quit...
i long for it nightly
well written
well worded
PEACE&WAR
The -poodle boy-
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I am sorry you slipped up hun!
Please, don't dwell on it.
Message me...
As for the poem,
very nice,
powerful,
and dark!
I really like it!
Good work, and good luck!
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