i.
the ventilator must be broken [again]
it keeps circulating the
same old particles of our conversations
through the air vents in my brain.
ii.
I’ve got an entire corner of my mind
dedicated to shovelling your toxic memories
in a haphazard mound
underneath that rug of man!c dust.
I can’t seem to find a broom willing
to sweep up our affection’s detonation.
I’m not sure I even own one.
iii.
I hate cleaning;:
I’d rather just let the grime collect and mould me.
I’d rather leave it to infect my nervous tissue
and eat away the feelings
which boiled up this spoiled mess.
I’d rather rot the organ that plucked all of the sombre melodies of the world
and plastered them to my brain
than hear you speak to my face and not my eyes.
iv.
I’m not sure I love you [anymore].
Author notes
"I need to figure out why my hearts
still beating;;cause baby its not you"
~*~**~*~
"Bags of Oranges Don't Leave Bruises"
Option #1: Dirty-Pretty && Option #8: Sorrow (Write about the pain in you heart)
In a list
A contest entry
- You Broke My Heart;;&& You Broke My Life To by glamour guts.
650 points, ended September 10, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Sad by LittleDecoy.
900 points, ended August 31, 2008, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poetry, Poetry and PreWrites! by Lost Vampyre Angel.
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Honorable mention
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Well this one has a message I can at least understand.
Still can't figure out what the requirements for DP are though. 
Best of luck...Scott
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great write...
a joy to read....
really touched me..
thanx
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BEAUTIFULY WRITTEN! GREAT FLOW! AWSOME WRITE! GREAT JOB!
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Very interesting write, I enjoyed reading it. =] It was very well written and had an excellent flow to it.
x-Pretty-Odd-x <3 -
this is great.
i really liked it.
the wording was beautiful. =)
thanks so much for entering & good luck -
I really like this. A lot.
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Nicely done. Great imagery and metaphors. In line 8 there is a ! in the word manic. Not sure if that was for affect or just a typo. thank you for the entry
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mmmm mmmmm mmmm
what an interesting write. i love the randomness of this piece. its imagery is so creative and unique. your creativity is wonderful here.
lovely write.
best wishes and best of luck -
good luck.
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wow.the imagery in all of this is amazing,
"I’d rather rot the organ that plucked all of the sombre melodies of the world
and plastered them to my brain"
^^that part right there caught me allot,that and the
last line made me smile really big.=]
thank you fer entering.
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