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Repitions (Luba Katz #2)

Impressed
I’m twenty-six stitches away from being
Obsessed
Visually over-stimulated
It filters into
Emptiness Nestled
Throat Deep in Soviet Reprise
Blessed you are
Blasphemed have I

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  • Grunts Girl gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    I have to ask
    What is a repition?

    this one made me feel like you two need to be alone


  • sassykitty
    August 5, 2008
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    Definitely a different abstraction going on here and I liked the use of contrasts in the final lines. Thought the second line 'I'm twenty-six stitches away from being/obsessed' was particularly powerful. Always good to read something so original. Thanks for sharing.


  • LalalalaLoopstah gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    I really, really like your choice of words here. I particularly liked "It filters into emptiness.." It reads very beautifully!!