You were everything to me
You were my ever watching angel
Then you went away
Then you broke my heart
The thought of you brought tears
The smell will last for years
But know I just stand here
But now I dont feel the same
So tired of it I am
So I'll just let the rain come down
Rain please come and drown me
Rain never stop so I can never be
A contest entry
- i deserve gold by Nicolette.
700 points, ended August 12, 2008, 11 entries
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It's so beautiful (yeah i use that word a lot) and I can relate to it too, as I'm sure many others can.
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Superb! it seems to have a lot of pain behing it too
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i enjoyed the imagery your words bring forth. You gave this piece an awesome title and emotion flows freely. I think you did a great job with this.
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This poem is both sweet and sad....very sad. If only rain could wash heartbreak away... You've expressed your emotions nicely here and simplicity is something I look for in poetry; yet, I think this one could have been less "telling" and more "showing". In this line "So tired of it I'm" - I would change it to "so tired of it I am" - it reads smoother that way. Thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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sadddd!
very well written
) good luck!
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this is not commented, so i shall be the first. good one here, hope u will never feel that way!!
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