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i.
I followed the scent of an apple
embedded in your fresh skin,
and I find just
in your humble body.
ii.
I composed my voiceless words
frozen between my tongue and lips,
and I find lust
triggering my inner soul.
iii.
I allowed myself to stumble in nakedness
touching every inch of heat,
and I find bliss
studying the sheets of loving.
iv.
I interjected the thrusting of body to body
consolidating tension soul vis-a-vis soul,
and I find eternity
flowering every second, every sweat.
v.
I heard the tension of moaning cooling off;
we embrace fruition warped in time,
and I find satisfaction
playing in the grounds of our final kiss.
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A contest entry
- Summer Sizzler...Men Only by Dalaney.
1300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites by leander.
730 points, ended November 30, 2008, 147 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm just speechless. Mabuhay kabayan.
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"studying the sheets of loving." -- I think an ellipses would work best at the end of this line.
Other than that, a nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam -
this is too beautiful for words. loved every part of this piece. it's sensual, magical and the flow is just perfect. good job hensley.
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I always liked poetry in vignettes, since every part of the whole stands on its own, but somehow still needs the complimentary ones as well...
Well done! thank you for this entry!
Leande -
This was goooood! Thak you so much for your entry
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ahh...just food for the soul and the senses...
as always...I'm just wow here...this is where...I'm so lost with words...I don't want to be slap on my face just to get back in my real sense...I'd rather linger with its beauty.
and I'm counting favorites again...this is my #2
I'll keep counting more
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I really like the first stanza and the idea of following the scent of an apple...or of any fruit. You have such lovely talent in all that you write.
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This one has a subtle sizzle of sensuality about it...just the right amount, just the right touch, Hensley.
I loved the last vignette, especially those final two lines...simply beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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yeah...this is wow...another one of my favorite poems in the contest..
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oh, wow.
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"and I find satisfaction
playing in the grounds of our final kiss."
this is absolutely gorgeous - thanks so much for this entry into our contest..
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