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My hands can mold
hopes from sawdust,
I said - aloud.
They burst into green
facets, laughing
with dappled tears.
I place myself
at the back
without color -
for a few seconds.
I know they laughed
as fully-emptied
canvases.
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A contest entry
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good words good form great poem well done
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Flowed nicely, really enjoyed reading this. A good poem that you have written here.
-Nam -
Some wonderful choices of words here, nicely done!
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Well this one is quite artistic...
and beautiful as well!
Definately considering this one!
thanks for the entry,
Leander -
my hands can mold
hopes from sawdust
what a unique medium
there's a twist of abstract
and realism in what you have painted
it appears you used nude colors
with this
you are really deep Hensley
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short yet very strong...kabayan, ang galing mong kumatha ng mga tulang nagbibigay ng matitingkad at matitinding kulay sa daigdig ng iba...isa ka talagang 'artist'...congrats on the silver!
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I'll try to comprehend your write. Aminin ko di ko maiisip yung mensahe nito, pero susubukin kong pag-aralan. Marami pa talaga ako pong dapat matutunan.
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shorter poems, when written well, can be so powerful. This is a great example. Beautiful.
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those last few lines are so powerful...
loved the contrast of "fully-emptied"
i know that feeling very well too
great poetry, my friend
~ Nicolette
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