Far beyond brittle pang,
‘heinous’ did not even hint
the blinding scarlet of the pain.
Impaled upon a meat hook,
her corpus twists
upon its cruelty,
metals,
corrosive and acidic,
agony so shrill,
piercing screams seeking vent
are silenced.
Caroming panic, collisions
splinter considerations,
collapsing paths.
Vicious extirpation
the only visible
nostrum.
I don’t care!
Kill the beast!
Or Kill me!
Vascular exertion.
Then ...
Vacant.
A dull throb,
delicious now,
measured against
scalded soul,
She sleeps.
In light again
she peers into the hole
once entombing
her buried anguish.
The hollow dimly glows.
Now she grieves.
It was never clear why
weakness hid
behind debasing.
Why the big-little
thrashed
the small-helpless.
The only refuge ...
a bound and buried
ferocious amnesia.
Now she knows
the algetic capsule
hid in waiting,
until she was loved enough
to unleash its
lightless chimera,
survive its caustic searing,
swathed in the embrace
of her other’s heart.
Vesicle so interwoven
into her scars,
absence feels
for a moment
like loss.
Vacancy soon backfills
with release.
While healing,
she leans into
his strong grasp.
The sky is lighter
as they lift it
together.
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Beautifully written...
I really enjoyed every word!
Simon
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until she was loved enough
to unleash its
lightless chimera,
survive its caustic searing,
swathed in the embrace
of her other’s heart.
Great song. Im in this contest too. Steelers' wheel.
Mine isn't anywhere in this vein.
This is sick and beautiful at the same time. The end sounded like a happy one, sort of.
Wonderful, you'd love my short story, All this Murder.
I wish you the best in this, even if Im in it to
jin
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this piece had my emotions flying on a roller coaster ride, nice job!
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Oh, the wonder of such knowledge that is suppose
to remain secret...
"weakness hid...behind debasing;
survive its caustic searing;
Vacancy soon backfills...with release"
Insight doesn't really cover it.
How one who only gives can suddenly find
satisfaction in letting go completely,
well, it is difficult to explain.
But I would say this captures the moment well.
Blue
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"...How one who only gives can suddenly find
satisfaction in letting go completely...."
Then Blue knows.
Secrets.... yes. Secrets. Somewhere every secret knows light.
It is special whenever you stop by, because you let yourself drift into and between the words, and feel the images.
Thank you Blue.
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Never did like the band Seether. But, that has nothing to do with your poem.
You had some great vocabulary, quite vivid words, dark and it did have quite a chill to it. Sounded like a cold travel. I liked the imagery, as well as the sounds I could hear from it..or that could just be Mutiilation that I'm listening to.
Overall, great poem and good luck in the contest.
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Exo, a little secret. Don't know the band or the song, just looked up the lyrics.
Thank you for reading the piece and dropping a comment. It is an allegory to an event and it is interesting to hear the divergent directions it seems to take folks.
Thank you for your wishing of luck.
RW
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Great imagery and vocabulary. You made it flow well andd left it to the reader to interpret for themselves. I admit I had two takes on it and seem to want to come back and read it again later. Thats a symbol of a good write. Pen on...~Poo~
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Thank you NurseyPro for digesting this. That you read it more than once is an honor. Yes, I like multiple interpretations as well. In that way the circle is complete in that the reader extends the meaning(s).
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This is amazing. The way you wrote this really has the wheels in my head turning. It makes me think, and the Imagery is awesome. I absolutely love this, really I do. Wow...I'm not sure what to say...
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Thank you kindly Walls for stopping by and reading the piece. If it had any effect then it does what it was intended to do.
Thanks again
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WOW... I'm almost speechless!
I found this gave me such a mixture of emotion! Anxiety, fear, lust, relief, love and a dull ache in my chest, tears in my eyes... an emotional journey to say the least. Which I won't go into too much here. But I wanted to leave you a footprint, so you know I'd read this, and found it astounding and brilliant.. and I will be bookmarking it. I had read it previously.. couldn't find the words.. and I feel I need to read it many more times...
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I am a little squirmy under such vaulted praise. Thank you J.
This is an allegory to an event. Drama abounds in everyday life.
I am honored this affected you. Thank you again KGJax.
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That's quite a poem. There are a lot of words here that you just don't find in most poetry, especially towards the beginning. This really burrowed its way inside my cranium, though I did have a hard time following the expression to some extent. The ending seems to be a reversal of emotions and it starts to feel more like love, not distain. My impression, or the strongest one at least, is that she is changing or perhaps, no longer herself and the tragedy is that she can not stop this, this aching? Don't tell me if I am right. I like learning what I want and, yes, this is quite solid. Certainly has me thinking, as you often do.
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James my man, thanks for peering into to this. There is an actual story behind this, now converted to allegory. But why allow reality to impinge license>
I very much appreciate you reading this little "thang". Its new so I am letting it roll around a while before I mess with it. -
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I have always admired the freedom in your work and no you should never settle for the obvious or in this case, the most followed road. If you do mess with it, tell me. I'll be around.
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