In distant drum-beat winds,
ancient fingers bleed in stone,
mankinds last dance,
scrawled in moon kissed stars.
Embraced by fate, steeped
in silence, greed scurries
rat like into dark corners of
fearful minds.
Tearful storm clouds patter
lifeless wheels of oil sapped
dreams; a dead child
in mother earths bosom.
Earth exhales her last breath,
dollar signs sink in
motionless seas, ideology
drowning in transformation.
Quetzlcoatl returns,
his prophecy complete,
The sins of man now mere
hollow reflections in his
mighty plumage, bathing light
on the crumpled cities below.
Consciousness smiles
in sun dappled rays,
licking the wounds
of the horizon,
"and the meek shall inherit the earth"
In a list
A contest entry
- 2012 by maa.
999 points, ended September 8, 2008, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All and any commnets appreciated :)
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Excellent
What an excellent write! I really like your style of writing. Great Job! Take Care
Dena
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Thank you for correcting me on the spelling
I will fix it thanks. As for the warriors of the rainbow.
Since the early 1970s, a legend of Rainbow Warriors inspired some environmentalists in the United States with a belief that their movement is the fulfillment of a Native American prophecy. Whether the prophecy originated from a Native American person may only be known by the author who first published the account, but the modern source of the legend is a 1962 book titled Warriors of the Rainbow by William Willoya and Vinson Brown from Naturegraph Publishers. Brown, who is attributed with research supporting chapters on Hopi prophecies, is the founder and owner of Naturegraph Publishers -
The stanza beginning Quetz
spell check 'prophecy'
Im pretty sure that's not a Brit spelling!
Enjoyed your work. Lots of interesting pieces in the contest. I have one, too. Can you supply any more detail in the rainbow warrior idea? Tribe and time pronounced, perhaps? Thank you... -
I love it! Great imagery "Consciousness smiles"
Poesy
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A Muse's Mesmerizing Metaphor...
Great work, Poet!!! Peace, Cyn 
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I thought the picture was representative of the Olympics in 2012 then I looked closer. Hmmm. Somehow your cynicism could spill a little drop that way.
We the Brit Taxpayers will inherit the debt!
One way or another.
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everytime i read another of your poetry....i become more and more amazed...you write with so much feelings ..i like that very much...well done my friend
juliet
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I am so glad you stopped by.....it gave me chance to hop over and read one of the best writes in a very long time.....standing ovation in southern CA
Each line has its' own uniqueness....power & strength are in every word ~
I could paste my fav part..but I'd be pasting practically the whole write
Lots of thought went into this.....your talent has me in awe my friend.....good luck to you and your entry,
...and God bless!
Bear ~
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The picture was, for me, superfluos. The punctuation added,perhaps, misplaced focus. The usage of Quetzlcoatl was both refreshing and yet frustrating, it is neither easy on the eye nor the ear. The references to oil and dollars suggested an anti- American stance. If the meek inherit the earth then the meek are cockroaches, it has already been scientifically proven that only cockroaches will survive those levels of radiation.
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nice poem best of luck in the contest
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Beautiful
I found this poem to be incredibly intriguing and well written. Especially the ending line...I know you can't take credit for it, lol, but it was beautifully placed in the poem, just perfect for an ending, and went well with the rest of the poem.
I liked the pic above as well
Great write and good luck in the contest!
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I truly love your poem and the creative and innovative manner you use language and imagery to leave a lasting impression in my mind and soul ... one of my favorites so far ...
I enjoyed the part with the "dollar signs sink in
motionless seas" and the one where "Consciousness smiles in sun dappled rays, licking the wounds of the horizon" ...
I guess I'll go hide in quetzalcoatl's rainbow plumage now ...
all the best, (you know where to find me
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maa
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Hello.
I thought I would read my poems namesake, hahah. Lovely imagery, and your moral stance is apparent in this, as you have woven it in with the graphic descriptions. Some of the images presented are very cinematic, dollar sign slowly sinking into the sea, crumpled cities bathed in light, good stuff. The biblical addition is a good touch.
I see you have done some research, I can appreciate that. I can not detect from the write, if you have come across writings that suggest Quetzalcoat is EA, with the snake as his symbol, very interesting stuff. Try the book 'Gods of Eden' to start off if you are interested in that sort of stuff.
I wish you well in the contest. My regards.
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i will never speak sober in this again
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i first started thinking with rush here with the title lol but gimme a break as i am as drunk as forever in my mad life
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This came great!
We both have the same chip in our heads...lol
Yours definitely had a more.... new beginning... rather
then the end,
which is the more popular believe...
that the world will start fresh ...
a new way to live...
different society.....
after something catastrophic happens.....
Forth and fifth stanzas are just so visual.....
this piece turned out beautiful.
My hat is off to you my good man.
Blessings my brother,
LOWELL POE
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Wow! Amazing imagery and metaphore in this. It was very saddening to read though. We needed to start making changes long, long ago for now it may be too late. Nicely penned!
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Graet Write
A little far out for me, but I guess I'm just old. Great write as far as technique goes....good flow.
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It's amazing to see a poem about the end of the world prophesy in 2012. I like how you tied Quetzlcoatl into this. I agree that if something doesn't happen quickly, the world will breath her last breath in just a few years. Thank you for sharing.
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I don't think the last reader realised that there is no future for mankind in your poem.a sad but true fact is that if we don't realise our fate soon, it might just happen.thankyou for an interesting read, Ros
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the future is always exciting to think about..wonder what new thing they will come out with in 2012..i tend to like to look ahead these days rather then behind me..phrophecy should read prophecy..ty you for sharing this
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