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Perpetual.

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Cast randomly as pebbles,
on the beach of life,
swelling and ebbing,
bumping and chafing,
rock upon rock.

 

Highs and lows
floating and drifting
on the tide of discovery,
timeless,
effortless.

 

Ground with perpetual
motion, sharp edges
round to easy tolerance,
smooth,
liquid acceptance.

 

Once jagged fragments
dug into bedrock formality,
hurtful,
ruthless,
angry.

 

But with the hourglasses
shifting sands
comes understanding,
troubled waters wane
from moons waxing.

 

So, the cycle of life
goes on beating to the heart
of nature,
stilled by the passage
of discovery.

 

 

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  • Lady Michaella
    May 5
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    wowwww!!!
    this is BEAUTIFULLY BREATHTAKING!! i love your imagery.. of the moon and all
    its stunning. i especially love your reference to the hour glass and its time, and with that time comes understanding.. very original and unique. thanks for this amazing, inspiring lovely read!!

    xx
    -Lady Michaella-


  • Heroesrox
    March 4

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    Awesome piece and I love that image at the top. Very great! Thanks for the brilliant share, my friend. Keep up the great work and best wishes to you!


    • cutiepie gold member
      March 5
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      Many thanks for you kind comments Glad you enjoyed it

  • jadeangyal
    February 12

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    "Ground with perpetual
    motion, sharp edges
    round to easy tolerance,
    smooth,
    liquid acceptance."

    So true! For better or for worse, is it not? Beautiful poem, and a very nice picture. Thanks for sharing.


  • Wailmer1997
    January 8

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    Very powerful words and images can be put in your head. well done.

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 30, 2008

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    The circles of life truly are perpetual. I loved the imagery that you have used in this piece to say as much. Very lovely and inspiring write. s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

  • vampedvixen
    October 15, 2008

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    I'm sitting here, about to go to my sister's wake since she died this weekend and this poem is the one thing I've heard in the past few days that has made me feel a little better. The whole metaphor of the moon making the tides turn and the troubled waters go away really hits home for me, because I am such a nature lover at heart. And the lines about the hourglass sands bringing understanding.. logically I know this, but emotionally it's very hard to find the words to get through to my heart, but these lines do that for me. So thank you, really, for this is a great poem when I really need one. Please keep writing. I think you have so much in you that you can share with the world through your creative writing skills

    • cutiepie gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Please accept my deepest condolenses at your very sad loss words are never enough but I am thankful you have found some consolation in the words of this poem. Be strong sweetie, as life goes on and your sister will always be with you.


  • Nicada silver member
    October 7, 2008

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    These are some really beautiful and amazing inner thoughts. You did a wonderful job putting life into this picture. I love the beautiful imagery used in this poem. Great job! Blessings, Patty


    • cutiepie gold member
      October 8, 2008
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      Thank you Patty, delighted that you enjoyed it


  • OnceUponAMind
    August 12, 2008

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    "Inner Thoughts" How absolutely beautiful

    First off, I totally love the picture. And you did well giving it life and meaning, in your own words.

    "Cast randomly as pebbles,
    on the beach of life,
    swelling and ebbing,
    bumping and chafing,
    rock upon rock."
    -- 'Cast randomly as pebbles, on the beach of life' What an interestingly creative thought - I love this

    "Highs and lows
    floating and drifting
    on the tide of discovery,
    timeless,
    effortless."
    -- 'The tide of discovery' - just a stunning visual with a bit of emotion rolled in with it. Nice.

    "Ground with perpetual
    motion, sharp edges
    round to easy tolerance,
    smooth,
    liquid acceptance."
    -- 'Liquid acceptance - this really stuck out to me in this stanza - great choice of words, and very expressive.

    "Once jagged fragments
    dug into bedrock formality,
    hurtful,
    ruthless,
    angry."

    "But with the hourglasses
    shifting sands
    comes understanding,
    troubled waters wane
    from moons waxing."

    "So, the cycle of life
    goes on beating to the heart
    of nature,
    stilled by the passage
    of discovery."
    -- What a perfect ending to such an immaculate piece!


    This has taken my breath away


    Amber









    • cutiepie gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comments on "Perpetual". It is always gratifying to hear positive comments as well as constructive comments. Many thanks


  • amanda vampiress
    August 12, 2008

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    wows!

    You captured the natural beauty of the circle of life in your poem, and I loved it! I like that you did not over power the natural beauty with extravagant wording, because sometimes less is better. I could clearly picture the scene you describe in my mind's eye. Very nice write! Keep up the good work.


  • poetryality silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    Dearest Heart,

    It seems like it has been many moons since I read and commented on your poetry. I've missed the magic in your words. This poem speaks to the realitites of life and living. An excellent penning my friend!

    I loved these lines;

    " Highs and lows
    floating and drifting
    on the tide of discovery,"


    Much Love Always ♥

    Re3nee


    • cutiepie gold member
      August 6, 2008
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      Thank you Renee Its lovely to see you, have missed youR cheery face


  • wattle silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    Ms Cutie, you always shine a torch towards the direction where calmness and nature grow wise. ---- Thank you.


    • cutiepie gold member
      August 4, 2008
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      I must be showing my age .. Nice to see you my friend


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    Wow,

    Love the language you use to express your thoughts!
    Truly Poetic, Thanks for sharing you, all the best!

    -Timothy


    • cutiepie gold member
      August 4, 2008
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      Thank you Timothy for your support, as always, very much appreciated

  • darrylblacksr
    August 2, 2008

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    This is a thought provoking poem which I am glad that I clicked into and gained a understanding or symbolism of the voyage of life... Thank you for sharing this with me...

    • cutiepie gold member
      August 2, 2008
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      Thank you Darryl for your kindness...it has been a while since I penned anything and am just getting back into the swing

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