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Morning’s in No Hurry

 

 

Intelligent conversation

is reduced to a type of

remote sparse repartee

and a few grunts after

 

the alarm goes off as

lips, tightly pressed

together, mumble,

"Um mornin, wuv yu."

 

We have that certain

understanding we two,

until Listerine and Crest

have done their thing

 

then, it's a race against

the clock, to get out of

the house, but not before

a proper morning kiss.

 

 

 

 

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Option #2-Morning's In No Hurry

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  • -shiningstars-
    August 5, 2008

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    I really liked this one because it made me giggle. It's oh-so true and i have had this experience many times. Good use of the title. Loved it.
    ~mackenzie
    good luck!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Ahh yes, the things that are ordinary in a relationship yet speak of comfortable presence.

    You write these moments so well MJ!


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    I like reading your "A day in the life of..." poems. Even when shift work takes its toll there are still those days when you both wake up together and life reverts to the familiar things...I always find those moments so comforting.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret


  • Myjoy gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Awwww

    Love these lines:
    We have that certain

    understanding we two,

    until Listerine and Crest

    have done their thing

    hehehehe silly little things. Fun to read, and a look within the life a man and his wife.


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    This poem has such a warmth, such a sense of closeness about it... yes, those slow, lazy hours before life and routine sets it.

    this one made my eyes all soft this morning..
    lovely poetry

    ~ Nicolette

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