it's only a matter of time
before i am nothing...
with ~s~c~a~t~t~e~r~e~d~ pieces of who i [[am]]
they slowly disappear into >nothing<
almost like my heart's gone numb...
you may see the pretty side of me
but look again...
i'm hideous on the inside.
a mess that me and people
have created..
a dying heart.
a painful mind.
just
l e t m e g o . . .
into my happy place
alone...
((again))
it's dark...
lonely...
**s o l i t u d e**
♥will i ever be loved again?♥
Author notes
boyfriend and i going through a break...not sure what to do...i use a lot of punctuation when i get depressed...hope you like. it did help get my sadness out a lil.
A contest entry
- Quickie.....???? Macabre and Ethereal..... by jcat.
525 points, ended August 5, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
whaddya think?
Comments
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You capture that hurt so well, it's such a hard thing to go through. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Oh....I forgot i had to add this..)
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This piece is saturated with emotion. I love this so beautifully penned! Hope that you are feeling better now emotionally.All the best to you and thanks much for commenting on my piece.Hope to read more of yours in the future.Take care.Janice
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Well you took my heart and twisted in a knot of of your angst!! Your use of DP here was actually nice and lent itself well to pulling the reader into your piece! Thank you for entering my contest
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I like this poem it has intense emotion
very well done -
this may not help, since you're so depressed and all, but you are completely beautiful in EVERY sense of the word. And if other people have made you change that about you... they're so not worth your time.
I'm sorry to hear about your situation though... let me know if you want to talk about it at all.
i love you. -
Artful take on the prompt. Lots of luck.
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Very sad... but a wonderful take on the prompt, creative and full of emotion... Well done and best of luck...
Ken
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