Oh the beauty of the pain
The cries of misery my very life
You fell for a pretty face
Never seeing the monster
You never knew the terror
Beauty could make
I skin you Oh so slowly
This my favorite game
Blood for the lonely
Deserted in your lustful sin
So die my lovely in a shallow grave
Death wears a pretty grin
A contest entry
- Quickie.....???? Macabre and Ethereal..... by jcat.
525 points, ended August 5, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - well....im not sure. by xrain dancerx.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I see why you won honrable mention.This is very well written.I liked what you had to say.Your creativity shows well.
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Blood for the lonely
Deserted in your lustful sin
So die my lovely in a shallow grave
Death wears a pretty grin
amazing ending on this piece. You have a gift for dark poetry.
Its hard to find someone else who has such a natural talent for the macabre.
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wow, this is very cool!! I love the dark side of poetry lol awesome job...good luck!!
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i love it! im a weird person yes...i think poems like this r the best. lolz. great job!!
thanx for entering and good luck!
*hugs* tay. -
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I'm glad you like it
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YIKES!!! You are a very disturbed individual but I find that I like that in a person!! Your last line here captivated me and I love it!! Gonna have to post that!! For alas it does seem that in todays society death does indeed wear a pretty grin! Thank you for your entry in my contest
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I like your flow and eerie darkness. Slight rhyme in the final lines suits well. Good luck.
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What a macabre take
Well done... I think you've captured the essence of this! Best of luck..
Ken
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