I mold myself from clay
- hands on approach
add life to bones
wrapped in weathered skin
that sheds
aging becomes inevitable
with time
8/1/08
Author notes
Prompt: solitude
A contest entry
- solitude by tara wilson.
2700 points, ended August 20, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - And I still haven't found what I'm looking for... by chasing rainbows.
875 points, ended January 10, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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short, but amazing (:
thanks
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"add life to bones" - I love this...it is all we can do...
I love the way this makes me think of our bodies...how different bones are than flesh. ..and how everyone ages differently, but we all age, yes...lovely entry, thanks, Becky
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Love your hands on approach!
Great take on the prompt.
Thanks for this.
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I do read this with an overall feeling of acceptance...as you say, there is no stopping time. Enjoyed!
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truly serene....
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Wow...
Short, beautiful and to the point!
I simply adore this, really, I do. Your form is brilliant. Keep it up and good luck in the contest!!!!
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These words express well what is beyond our
control, but at the same time, I feel they
also convey a kind of peace in acceptance. Blue
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you cerainly expressed the solitude of aging while growing well in 25 words! I too have alot to say in excess mostly lol and have problems with writing such short pieces well done I enjoyed the read
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This is good stuff. I don't think I've ever read one so short from you.
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Powerful, speaks volumes!
All the best,
mj.
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Great title
Being a big fan of short poems, I love this.
Joe
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You really are on a roll lately with your poetry.
Again, I am left with barely anything critical to mention, which I guess, is a good thing. I think you should go with a more simple title though, like "skin" or something. The poem is so short and thoughtful that you don't really need to have a long title. Top-notch stuff.
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I think it is the solar thingy going on...
It is pulling all of the gravity out of my brain...
I like the title and made it a contest inspiration of which I hope you write something for...
It is short because the host (Tara) said 25 words or less. Usually I have so much to say...LMAO
you are a gem...
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Well, I loved the short aspect and I think you have done a good job focusing, especially since you usually don't post small poems. I figured there was some reason for the title. Thank you for telling me.
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Oh and happy late birthday
Cheers to you!!!
WhoooooHooooooo PARTY like it's 1999...hehehe
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