I sit alone in my garden
reading
The breeze turns the pages
I close the book,
trapping my life
inside.
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Prompt
I am looking for an observation made in solitude.
In a list
A contest entry
- solitude by tara wilson.
2700 points, ended August 20, 2008, 42 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Intense rawness, narrowed well
This is as an anticipated record of your place, except more deeply because quickly, there's stress flipping the pages, not allowing you to concentrate anyway. When you were in such a peaceful environment, looking through the volume of love perhaps, maybe flimsy instead of hardcover. The bitter wind of not getting along on more and more things like miles per hour, and then your heart can't get evacuated safely... I love how you say "I sit alone" in the first line, because what you would strongly and happily believe in, is a casebound, a living one! Summer days have drifted away for long winters.
"book" is a powerful metaphor for many things, even sad, congratulations on your gold reward for your caption of effort,
Daisy -
Such beautiful images, and strong emotional impact! The breeze moves the pages, but the narrator can close (or open) the book... so much can be taken from this piece. Congratulations on the well-deserved gold!
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This is beautifully penned...and I guess, in a way, are lives are trapped between the pages through our memories, or the ones others have of us. Enjoyed this. Definitely worthy of the gold. Congrats!
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Wow, so much impact in this trapping. It is melancholic, and yet so beautifully expressed. Many congrats on the well-earned gold honor.
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"The breeze turns the pages"
I feel that this is such an important line in this poem...I love the creativity & process of thinking....your idea here in the poem...it leads me to thinking you want to freeze this moment in your life, as if 'closing a book' on its page, perhaps...suspending this moment in your garden, and sometimes, it can be a good thing, or a bad thing, hence your word choice of trapped....very, very well done, thanks for this entry
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This is lovely poetry - loved the visuals here.
~ Nicolette
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Boffo!
This is so tight and straight and true.
And sad.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is great!
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metaphors and cadillacs
summer days
and tidal meanings
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Nicely done. So much said in so few words. I am a sucker for any poem that involves reading a book. I enjoyed it alot.
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Definitely a lesson in how to say a lot using few words. This is excellent.
Bill
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