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Horsewhipped

Horsewhipped communities
trampled under the fear and loathing
of time wasting mediocrities
turning valuable evenings
into hate rallies.
We, the underdogs
resist and wage a mental war
getting up after being put down
kicking back while being tied up
Fight on!

A contest entry

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  • Zenda-Lokki
    December 20, 2008

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    Very thought provoking and says so much i so few words. I think the length is just right and puts your point across without the need to "waffle". Great write, would be surprised if this one doesn't get alot of votes.


  • reckless abandon
    September 3, 2008
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    THis kept me thinking the entire way through. Very good. THanks for entering and good luck.


  • Topaze
    August 12, 2008
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    An interesting write, well done. Thank you for your fine entry in this contest.


  • Oh Dee Mhac One
    August 7, 2008

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    At war with the world? Where do you find peace, does mediocracy really exist or is it how we experience- I found your poem frightening and challenging- perhaps just as art should be

  • piccola silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    I really like the message here and the way it is told. The ending is very effective. "getting up after being put down kicking back while being tied up" nice job thank you for the entry.


  • jscribbled
    August 4, 2008
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    Strong. I agree. Beautiful.


  • Crazy Coconut
    August 4, 2008
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    Wow now this is a very strong emotional filled poem! I can relate to all you wrote. Hate rallies seem to run rampant in our world these days! Excellent. best to you in the contest


  • Crazy Coconut
    August 4, 2008

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    Wow now this is a very strong emotional filled poem! I can relate to all you wrote. Hate rallies seem to run rampant in our world these days! Excellent. best to you in the contest

  • dogpooper
    August 1, 2008

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    strong in a good way

    I firmly identify with the feeling and pulsation of this poem. You are powerful in your weakness. We become strong in our weakness; strong through tenacity.

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