Too many hopes and dreams can only bring depression.
If you were locked in a windowless chamber,
if you watched all your candles burn from wick to stone
and if they burned all at the same time,
then after this only comes darkness-
in which you stay....
alone.
(After this there are no decisions)
You are doomed....
to be entrapped....
by....
your so called....
Fate.
Hopelessness.
A contest entry
- Why Not? by Hebz.
395 points, ended August 24, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What is the picture this creates in your mind and what feelings does it give you?
Comments
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ooooh I feel this. I just can't express though...just contemplating...
If you were locked in a windowless chamber,
if you watched all your candles burn from wick to stone
and if they burned all at the same time,
then after this only comes darkness-
in which you stay....
alone.
You describe a picture so clearly...something that penetrates into your mind...it almost becomes a memory.
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"Too many hopes and dreams can only bring depression."
This must be stated as a universal fact, though sad but true.
Very good piece, Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Hi, thanks for the comment. I had never thought about that story but yes I guess it does convey a very similar sentiment! (even though that story is in fact much more terrible...) for me the sense of fear is something that underlies the meaning of this poem. a fear about life and decisions, death and choices.
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This reminds me a little of that news story recently regarding the poor woman whose father kept her captive in a windowless room.
You have created a sense of fear, deep within this poem ... very well expressed!
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