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On a Friday after Baby Sitting & Beans on Toast

 

 

The gardener tends the pink roses

& dead-heads unwanted things too:


                                             she isn't suprised by what she sees, greenfly, blackfly, snails and

                                             then what she hears - from him


 

he lights a  smoke in the small yard,   it's the only place he can, no longer fumes in the house


 

she twirls her fingers in almost biting anticipation

not that she'd ever smoke again - provocative as it seems


 

he chastises her for the thoughts of it

and offer his hand in friendship - calls her 'old gal'


 

      
                                      funny - she used to think of  summersex and things that copulate in the sun


 

but now

as the cloud breaks

they chink coffee cups

and talk of vicarious people and living-friends

and if two plus two really does make fifty six

or four

and if Noah really did build the ark with three 'appence a foot



 

she impales a snail on a twig

and launches it into the greatbeyond


 

& his lop-sided smile and eye twinkle

warms her being - he says she's a murderer


 

& they tie noose-like laughter to wind chimes

the afternoon passes so quickly




 


 

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  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    August 2, 2008

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    I like this 'gardeners approach' you've been using.
    It seems to be like a place, and oasis in the middle of an otherwise busy-ness where thoughts can be more clearly contemplated.
    Just the kind of place I like to smoke a ciggy myself. Mmm I'm also pretty cruel to slugs and snails in my garden.

    I much like the way you've set this out as well, which as you know, is something I can struggle with at times.

    Long may your gardening grow!

    Sol x


  • jantastic gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    and offer his hand should be "offers"

    I could mention how my yard is full of snails and earwigs... I wasn't going to but there we go, I've done it now... that's good to make people spring to things they can relate to. Beans on toast... classic

    I'll stop now.. think I need my morning coffee

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    As always, love the naturallness of your creativity and was enjoying thoroughly 'til the poor snail was impaled! At least he had a mercifully quick death, I thought that salt was a natural deterrent after being told so by a friend and feel guilty to this day that it was but a cruel, slow, agonizing death for them, if only I'd known.


  • tara wilson gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    it was so nice to see a new poem up by you on my favorites list, even better reading it Love the mood, as always, a pleasure


  • apples fell
    August 1, 2008

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    Well snails aside, I felt a washing of the soul here. A cleanse that must be fulfilled, in order to move forward. This seemed strange: "thoughts of it", I see what you were doing, but you had the word "it" right before, only a sentence ago, so, I think you could find a way to implicate the image better there. Everything else is seriously strong. All the little observations I think add to the piece and I especially loved the opening two lines. I think the format also helps add to the piece, that quality that is always strung up far too quickly as our spade meets the soil. Thoughtful work gilly love.

    ;


  • Lucy.
    August 1, 2008

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    Oh, the poor snail! Lol, funny how others have already mentioned that. I was getting lost nicely in your poem til you impaled the snail...

    Poor little bugger. Anyway, apart from that, this was lovely, really lovely.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 1, 2008

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    I applaud anyone who make snails appear beautiful lol and of course they have apartment blocks in my garden and Amex Love, C


  • ArtFullyMe silver member
    August 1, 2008

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    I'm with Suzi... lol I like snails..
    but then I'm a lousy gardener.. I don't kill snails either.. or aphids .or any of the things I should...

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 1, 2008

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    when is the funeral?

    slugs and salt are fun.

    love this.


  • iverbthenoun
    August 1, 2008
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    whew!*whistles*


  • ca ne fait rien
    August 1, 2008
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    A relief of pressure -flowers chatter in the post storm sun.

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 1, 2008

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    Those last two lines are killer, Gilly.

    You killed a poor snail!

    slugs.. i'm cool with disposing of
    but snails they are cute!

    lol

    I like this, it has the easy feeling of the familiar that always seems to make me want to stay around.



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