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~ He Slept ~

It was where dreams nestled and slept
  that called to him most –

For cotton lands are sprayed with her:
bountiful perfumed roses
dancing in creamed petals.

Starbursts sparked entirely of delight
whilst the heavens sang in rejoice
that redemption was in the tendrils
of angelic harmony.

His hope could only climb
once he was wrapped in the whim
     of her ~

and lips are fed blessings
from the breasts of feathering eternity.

His soul caressed with sweeping images
of the untarnished stem –
that cuts but never drinks of the blood.

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  • gllarso
    September 10, 2008

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    Beautiful!

    I can really relate to this one, sometimes I like to take refuge in dreams, if only to see someone one more time...beautifully written and the imagery is superb.
    -Garrett

  • Cinnarry gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    I don't think I've read anything so beautiful as this in a long time.

    pure poetry.


  • poetryality silver member
    August 27, 2008
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    ~Sigh

    The sensual beauty of this poem spills over into the reader's heart. The soft allure of your words strikes the heart of all who venture here. This poem is exquisite!

    Thank you for the entry and I wish you the best in the challenge.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Frozentearz
    August 21, 2008

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    I think Nicolette has said it all what more can I say besides your poetry always leaves me in awwwwwwwwwe..
    Wonderful work my Dear poet wonderful work.
    Blessings.
    Frozentearz


  • z etoile
    August 15, 2008
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    great poem I enjoyed this piece keep writing.

    MJ


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    August 13, 2008
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    this is beautiful ^^ you did a great job ^^


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    There is such a lovely dreamy quality about this poem…..something wispy and light and ethereal. I liked the way this poem speaks to all the senses – some lovely rich imagery in this one, Melanie. Somehow it made me think of how I always refer to sleeping and dreaming “that place far east of the sun and far west of the moon” – a journey of delightful visuals. I really liked the opening line – it immediately draws the reader into the poem. Lovely work.

    Thank you so much for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • tomisb
    August 5, 2008

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    You know, I like this poem. The images are delightful and dreamy but I only know it is hair because of the contest. Then when I re read it I can pick out the words and phrases that allude and whisper of hair. It changes the tenor and course of the first two opening lines. You catch the wonder and the desire, you undress and set free the scope and song of the inner feelings and passions within the man. Yet, you are so subtle that I did not see or feel the stroke of the hair at first. It is so easy for a poet to do, to be caught in the dance of idea, the vision so deep in the waters of thought and dream that we forget that everyone does not see what is obvious to us.
    Love, Tom B.

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