Beneath carnivore sky,
fate's piranha canopy
for dream clouds,
strolling through fields
of shadow's secret,
holding nostalgia's innocence ebony parasol
as shelter against tear drops.
Toting lunch pale
filled with spoiled love notes
having taste of charred heart pastries.
Spreading hope's blanket,
covering meal
in forgiveness icing,
looking towards distant clearing,
knowing someday will picnic
on feast other than bittersweet.
Author notes
60 words
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A contest entry
- It's Quickie Time Again!!! by Sweet Impatience.
950 points, ended August 1, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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'carnivore sky' Brilliant!
'toting lunch pale' what a great image
Major beauty in this piece. Just amazing!
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What a delightful flow of metphors. The reader is absorbed into the feast of bittersweet. Sad picnic, but, presented in perfect mood with the prompt. Love forgiveness icing leaves the reader to decide what cake it will go on.
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Oh I loved this ~ best of luck in the contest
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this is absolutely breath taking & filled with imagery.
excellent take on the prompt. I love the first two lines of this poem. outstanding job with the poem..
good luck
kat
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Ohhhh this is gorgeous bro!! I was just entering this myself as it closed..
Your write is amazingly beautiful. Best of luck!!
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a great poem very deep and full of powerful emotions good luck in the contest
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