when looked at objectively
honor doesn't matter anymore
and worth can be counted
by tallies on the ledger sheets
right there for all to see in black and red
and the diamonds around
a beautiful sycophant's neck
are more precious in this world
than the hard-fought attainment
of tempered self-assurance
through humility and grace
and the winners look at the fools
and shed sanctimonious tears of pity upon them
as the fools stare back in disinterest
unwilling to acknowledge
THAT WORLD
in an act of selfless compassion
purged in the eternal flames of enlightenment
immune to the lie of objectivity
as honor matters once again
Author notes
Me: there are two ways to improve your poetry
Me: 1 is to work like hell at it
Me: 2 is to become a better person
Me: if you do both, it works best
Cynic: not sure I agree with you about the better person however
Cynic: all poetry is for entertainment
Cynic: all life is come to that
Me: Nu-uh! A poem that is written better but does not inspire is not as good as a worse written poem that does inspire.
Inspiration is far more valuable than words.
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A contest entry
- even... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended August 15, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I must say you never 'fail' to fascinate...however do you do it? When I find out your 'secret' hahaha I'm running full steam ahead Congrats on the Silver
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Humm..you are running against the wind..yet the wind is changing its direction to be with you here.....well done..
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Honor, worth, self assurance, humility, grace, faned empathy, selflessness, compassion, enlightenment, This is so full of...no, I'm not going to say pooh-pooh, I'm saying there is so much wisdom in this poem that to truly understand it all, I would have to keep re-reading it for a year. AWESOME and all true. loved it. yours, Belle xx
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Another way to improve your poetry is to put it into some type of formal form. This is deep and complex in spirituality and metaphor. I can just imaging how beautiful it would be if it was penned in an acrostic sestina with an internal rhyme. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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I would never work that hard on a poem for a cynical Englishman. That's your territory.
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True, true... I don't think too many people Allan, would consider you, unwise, that's for sure. You really stand 15 feet tall in this masterpiece, hopefully others stand with you and not beneath.
You have many gifts to release, so what are you waiting for?
She-ra
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Wow! my friend, you give us a lot to think on in this one! Both in the poem and your comment! This is great! (and I happen to agree with you, Inspiration is very valuable, but if you can take that inspiration and use it, and turn it into words, that work, and can show the world, what you are saying, then you have acheived perfection!)
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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