I hide my eyes from the light
because the truth is too painful to bare.
I do not dare speak of evil,
travelling on the winds of sadness
to feed on the weak.
Sworn to secrecy
about the terms of my passing,
I emerge from the shells of sorrow,
to roam with freedom
among the butterflies.
Author notes
Prompt Image B: as used in body of poem http://night-fate.deviantart.com/art/sajhrnera-92862146
40-60 word limit. my word count = 56.
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Sworn to secrecy
about the terms of my passing,
I emerge from the shells of sorrow,
to roam with freedom
among the butterflies.
Love it! So cool and beautiful pic. Wonderful job and good luck!
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I hide my eyes from the light
because the truth is too painful to bare.===> I like this though these lines seem like they have been used a little toomuch.. But I like the emotion in them..
I do not dare speak of evil,
travelling on the winds of sadness
to feed on the weak===> this was very haunting which I like.. though I think that the first line is a little over used with poetry I still like how you matched it with the rest..
Sworn to secrecy
about the terms of my passing,
I emerge from the shells of sorrow,
to roam with freedom
among the butterflies.===> I kind of think that the last line states the obvious in the picture, but these lines still sighed softly upon the page..
well done.. I liked this..
Angel
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Whoa.
I love the cloak of darkness that this wears and the soft ending that is powerful within
Wonderful poem!
Best of luck!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Great
I loved it.
"I hide my eyes from the light
because the truth is too painful to bare."
I can relate. Lovely word play.
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Hidden words, unable to speak and share the thoughts from whence I came! Wonderful poem and words to suit the pic! Good luck in your contest ~Sie
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It would be so nice to roam free with the butterflies. The ending of this piece gives a very nice image.
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outstanding job with the prompt. I love the first and the second stanzas.. this is an excellent poem, one that I enjoyed reading
good luck
kat
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I love this....The pic fits it perfect ...Beautifully done once again, Cuz...You always amaze me....
Lynda
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a great take on the promt full of deep emotions good luck in the contest
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