lazy summer days
cattails leaning in the breeze
castles built on sandy knees
by loving hands that touched a distant shore
sketch the picture gray and blue
see the world is all brand new
with soft brown eyes that opened my heart’s door
starry autumn nights
dance to tunes in lovers’ mime
hold the one who helped me find
a place where hate and hurt can not exist
dream the dream as dreamers do
make a wish for me and you
and seal that promise with kismet’s kiss
now I understand
what they tried to do to you
and how your love held true
with all you had to give but never owned
chasing shadows on the ground
treasures lost and treasures found
by souls that never have to be alone
now I understand
Author notes
I hope she understands
by leo2
member since April 24, 2004
A contest entry
- Favorites Only Please! Thank You! by poetryality.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So wonderful, understanding, wonderful flow of words. The detail is excellent. It does remind me of warm summer days. Thats right warmer days are coming. It was a pleasure to read.
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Beautiful, my brother, beautiful indeed
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I hope so too! Leo this is a wonderful piece of poetry. Brilliant and quite moving....you did well!!!
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lovely
lovely imagery, this paints beautiful pictures reminds me of warm summer days and nights, feeling safe and warm.
I particularly like this stanza Leo :
starry autumn nights
dance to tunes in lovers’ mime
hold the one who helped me find
a place where hate and hurt can not exist
dream the dream as dreamers do
make a wish for me and you
and seal that promise with kismet’s kiss
what person could fail to understand
xxx cheryl
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Of course I understand! LOL
Your sentiments are embracing, and give the reader an uplift. Your sincerity shines like the Leo I have come to know, and love with all my heart!
This poetry is an example of your loving spirit and ability to write with the intensity of such a lyrical moment in time.
Very beautiful Leo! Yes, your passion and rhyme is flawless. Sigh!
Thank your for posting this poem in my challenge. I wish you the best in this contest and every endeavor life has to offer.
Always & Forever ♥
Renee
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Lovely Words!!
You have penned a beautiful poem. Soft and sweet imagery makes for a delightful read. Good luck in the contest. Take care.
Sandy
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Oh, my friend, how much I love this song! Isn't it about Van Gogh? "Starry, Starry Nights?" You did this song justice with the meaning. Your meter was perfect for the song. (I song along!) One suggestion: omit the "a" before the word "kismet's. I once wrote this verse also, changing the words. I still have it. It's called "Vincent's Black Roses" Your thoughts here are so beautiful and wishful. If there truly was a place like this, I would join you and all of our friends there, to celebrate love and friendship! Best wishes.
LOve,
Linda
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If I were the lady for whom this was intended, I would simply say
I do
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Simply beautiful ...
thoughts that you have shared in this poem and thoughts that I completely understand. This poem is a fine example of your efforts and it's always a blessing for me to read such positive and uplifting thoughts, even if we have to dream them! Very nice Leo!
Sincerely, j
y
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This is beautiful. I hope she understands too.
There are too many things in this that I like to point anything out that I might like especially. ONe day maybe she will. I've had to take back my misunderstandings more than once, in my life, that's for sure.
I think this is sweet, genuine, and sincere.
I wish you the best, and blessings.
Jin
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Beautiful words, wonderfully put together
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This was such an amazing poem. You might want to change; "See the world as all brand new" or See the world all brand new", it would sound better if you changed it. I really like line 13 "Make a wish for me and you/and seal that promise with a kismet's kiss. I love the word kismet. I truly believe fate exists. A lovely poem indeed. Thanks for sharing.
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You could tell the strains of Vincent the very first stanza, you have done it so very well. Just beautiful. C
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Ah Leo ...
You must have listened to Vincent when you wrote this BEAUTIFUL poem, Leo ... Was that the prompt? But nevertheless: your words are lovely and hopeful, and filled with love and encouragement. It is PERFECT! Please sing this one day to your fiance, will you? For it is almost a wedding song ...
Wishing you all the best, my friend, not only in this contest but also for a bright and happy future.
Love
Myra
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