Open mouthed..
drinker of the poison.
Swallowed blood of nectar,
drop by drop.
Raised tender pain,
ripples raw on naked skin.
Drowning heart..
sinks into oblivion.
tethered wings
clipped..
Author notes
Option 1) 10 lines
A contest entry
- Quickie with options.. by Angelflower.
600 points, ended August 2, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Love this...
So much said in so few words...
Great narrative, rhythm & flow...
And I've got to say some great wordplay/choices/use that make this another dark, profound & heartfelt write...
Well done!!!
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Julie, Have I ever asked you how long you've been creating poetry? LOL. I can't remember. When I read something like this, it feels like there is a lifetime of experience flowing from your pen. You are such an amazing poetress sis. I love you.
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Oh! I really liked this.. the image was really vivid and detailed!!! bravo! I greatly enjoyed this.. thank you very much for sharing! best of luck!
Angel
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Oh neat! 'tethered wings clipped' first bound then broken. What a great take on the prompt. Really well writ!
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Thank you hun
Auntie xx
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Wow wicked take on the picture. Love the darkness in this has a sad vibe to it also. Perfectly penned hunni
Good luck in your contest
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Thank you hunni xx
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Mum I love this so much.. WOW. excellent job with this. I was going to do the same option but chose not to...
such a sad poem that you have penned. I can relate to lines 7 & 8..
absolutely love this poem
good luck Mum
kat
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Thank you xx
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