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pollution


Pollution-
takes over nature.
Cannot stop it's glory.
We will be destoryed-
to lie

-dead-

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  • Desire gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: pollution
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ In line four- looks like word: destoryed- was not quite sure if You meant destroyed or destined- for either one would fit-
    after reading I was being shown how pollution destroys- our drinking water- seeps into the soil- harms the environment also marine life- and with one action- a reaction-Beauty tainted by -polluted- discoloration I keep being shown, the way things we use are discarded can have harmful effects Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully this makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Magnificent images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 1, 2008
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    Short but sweet

    Its a very short poem, but it says alot in those few lines, Reuse, Recycle, Reduce...