Atop the city of dreams a gaze is lost on crystal hopes
Where empty thoughts echo above soulless heads.
Stark desolate hearts have fallen hard from the stormy skies.
Somewhere amongst the thick maple-like fog
I throw my hands in front of me,
For I need to know If I am really here.
I hear the howling screams of the lost girl that fell;
She whales her voice against the concrete jungle
Hoping to one day find her way back home.
Had only she known the story of Hansel and Gretel!
Author notes
hmmm, wonder who THIS is about!??
opt 2
A contest entry
- Quickie with options.. by Angelflower.
600 points, ended August 2, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty always appreciated
Comments
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Wow, so deep in such a short write!! Great job on this!!
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Very nice quickie. I like how you ended it. Best of luck in the contest.
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aww, thanks hun!
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I like it, I think it is pretty creative.
It is dark, and full of emotion!
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it's easy to get the emotion...when it's real emotion
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wow, an amazing write indeed.
It's really dark and strong, and gives it a little of a ghosty feel.
The best of luck in the contest!
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thank you, sweety!
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oh!!! the ending is a really interesting twist!!! I really liked this.. you did a wonderful job with the prompt.. very personal and emotional.. thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck...
Angel
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still love ya, green lover!
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this is sad yet cute :]
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lmfao!! cute? okay!
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lol the ending made me giggle XD
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YOU made me giggle!
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yay!!!!
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