I breathe you in knowing
It is one of my last
Words cannot describe how
Much I want to touch you
Like the bitter words ending
a poem, our last on Earth.
I grasp your hand in mine as
we make love our final farewell.
A contest entry
- Challenge#5: a poem in 40 words by Virgoan.
600 points, ended August 16, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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the brevity of this is beautiful. on a personal note, i prefer that the last two lines be transferred or deleted. The first 3 stanzas/couplet are well entwined.
my thought, your call
thanks for sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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This is a lovely loving way to spend your final day with the one you love, together at the end it is what is important to you the decides how you spend it. Good luck with this loving write.
~sugar~
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Very passive and sweet, meloncholy. hell if it was the last day on earth I'd be going out with a bang and a YEEEEEEEEE Haawwwwwwwwwwwww.
Nice take, best of luck... Scott
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