My eyes are closed and i see you
You are my star light bright and true
Hmmm i can even smell you too.
The way your fingers feel it's real i deal
The way you touch it's easy to the touch
the warmth and thickness of your lips wow it sends me in 2 a trip.
tell me what else i need 2 do with this.
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I think you have a good set up you just need to fill in the details a little more. You say " My eyes are closed and I see you" add a line after it with detail on what you see, what your vision is. Same goes for line 4 you say "Hmmm I can even smell you too." What is it you smell. Good write you just need some details.
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