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Therapy.


The imitation-friendly beamed at me.
Yellow walls and dried flowers
Radiating happiness.
Everything in its place.
No lines I thought to straighten
Or pieces that didn't belong.
It's like they knew they'd be dealing with
my type.

"Make yourself at home,"
A smiling invitation of bare feet.
I made myself uncomfortable 

on the comfortable upholstery. 

"Tell me why you're here."

 

My interrogator beamed once more.

The radiating walls were happily suffocating me

with their openness.  

The clock was jovially ticking--

constant, steady, mocking,

urging me to break the silence.

But I like my silence whole, thanks. 

 

I held the ticking in my hand

[better not let it get the best of me]

And kept my silence whole.

The interrogator continued to beam,

Warmly. Like the yellow of the walls.

She looked trustworthy enough,

but it was all in the name of career. 

 

She looked strange, somehow,

like a human semblance of an animated animal. 

I entertained myself with the thought.

A horse, maybe?  In the mouth.

Off in a humorous sort of way.

 

"The switch for the lamp in the waiting room,"

I started, "It turns on the radio." 

The yellow beam never faltered.

The ticking continued.

It occured to me I was bidding my time.

Might as well say what she wanted to hear.

 

The walls and smiles grew fingers

searching, prodding.

Broad questions were met with superficial answers.

I never liked yellow.

I started counting clocks.

I started counting ticking.

 

Prod as the sunbeams may,

They couldn't pierce my armor.

Warmth wouldn't win over my skin.

 

And only the ticking's what it seemed.

The lady behind the warm beaming

Didn't always beam.

And peel back the yellow paint

--You're left with cold, concrete grey.

 

Maybe I am crazy, after all.

Doesn't matter, time is up. 

"Well, it's been great talking to you,"

the yellow beamer spoke.

 

It's been like talking to a wall. 

 

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Hmm... there are motifs here that lead to nowhere...

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  • Redeemed15
    August 7, 2008

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    Wow. Your like talking about me! I hate therapy. After a while they give up. You can drive them crazy making them think you are crazy. .


  • pulsating
    August 7, 2008

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    im able to sympathize...seems like they are just there to talke to you because they are getting paid....like the reference to yellow and the imagery...i like yellow however i know it's not for everyone


  • think of me x
    August 7, 2008

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    Eww, I know this feeling just a little too well
    Not that the poem was "ew", but the memories were!
    Only a couple things I thought I might mention
    "The radiating walls were happily suffocating me
    with their openness."
    I think maybe "suffocating me"
    should move down to the next line
    Maybe it was just my strange imagination
    but the way it's written now felt like
    it messed with the meter.
    Could all be in my head, but there's my suggestion
    Also, you focus on a lot of cliche yellow references
    Like the happy and the sun, repeatedly
    Since you do mention a couple,
    maybe you could mention more?
    A different one in every stanza
    It'd add a little more to the poem
    At some points it seems repetitive
    since you reuse words like "happy", "beam" or "sunshine"
    But I really love the idea!
    It's nice to see I'm not the only one
    Who feels repelled instead of comforted by therapists.


  • Mori-lux
    August 7, 2008

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    Great Job

    I understand it perfectly. I myself have been through plenty of hours of theropy, and never found peace in the happy little pastel walls or teady bears. The first couple sessions with my privious thropist I spent turning her questions around onto her, and being as difficult as I could mannage.

    But nowadays I seem to be mentaly healthy. Life going on prooved a better theipist than theropy it's self

    Anywho you did a great job. Keep it up.


  • AnonymousXO
    August 7, 2008
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    I liked the description in this. The poem made me wonder. Good job though!
    AnonymousXO


  • The Otep
    August 7, 2008

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    Wow a new outlook! This is a great write (exspecially for a pyschologist in the making here!)

    Lovely image and wording! Great write!!

    Be Blessed

  • ArchangelsParamour
    August 7, 2008
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    I love how this told a story.


  • Bleed the truth X
    August 5, 2008

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    wow..not how i would describe therapy but everyone has their point of view on their experience.
    itsa whole new outlook.


  • Walls-within
    August 2, 2008

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    Wow, I really enjoyed this. It is an amazing recreation of something so emotionally real life. Great piece!


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 1, 2008
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    Diffrerent

    Its an really unsaul poem, but that is what makes it so good


  • SilverWolf
    August 1, 2008
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    wow!!
    i dont understand ur AN tho
    great poem!!!
    lol to the last line

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