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The Sultry Eclipse

this sultry eclipse
stilling passionate air
a seductive kiss
ricochets our velvet breaths
perusing lips, in mysterious fusion.
upon sliced life
buttering silky smooth whispers
bordering upon wet intensities
the knife severs into the liqueur
savoring every salivating  indulgence
rich exhilaration!
Passion glistening in liquid blindness
of undeniable fragrances
an astral  symphony
of our sweet fermenting whispers
this exclusive moment,
entirely raw and intimate
this sultry eclipse
of our velvet breaths

Author notes

Soulful Bubbles


My Best Bud Omanixax and i put together two of my smaller poems and made this piece.
Proof of the rules i read






“Evening minuetto in a castle by the sea
A jewel more radiant than the moon
Lowered Her mask to me
The sublimest creature the Gods, full of fire
Would marvel at making their Queen
Infusing the air with Her fragrant desire
And my heart reeled with grave poetry....”

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  • nature
    December 14, 2008

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    In one breathe...

    ....'The Sultry Eclipse' infuses to amplify the moment of a kiss in its liquid beauty.

    Congrats, how you bring out the emotions in word play.A short spell write in innocence with fluid magic in passion.

  • limechic
    August 24, 2008

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    ooh excellent imagery! Took me a second read to understand everything completely, but I like it! Very sensual

    Great job, good luck in the contest!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 15, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken and sensual entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    August 6, 2008
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    This was nice, however a bit hard to read the font against the background.

    **Master Ktulu**


  • Ho74pp1eP1e
    August 5, 2008

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    This is lovely, I am really happy I got to read it.
    Still not what I am looking for though, even though I really enjoyed it.

  • piccola silver member
    August 4, 2008
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    this is nice. I enjoyed your rich use of vocabulary. thank you for the entry

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