the scars, etched into my soul,
engraved into my heart.
the reason why the tears fall
and why I'm torn apart
uncover the deep gashes
to find the reason why
each crystal teardrop falls.
why I hide, why I cry.
Author notes
Quote #4: "You have to crawl into the wounds to discover what your fears are. Once the bleeding starts, the cleansing can begin."
Quote credit: Tori Amos
This came out really badly, please help me fix it. I want honest critique!!! I hate the way it came out!
A contest entry
- Quote Contest by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended August 5, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest feedback, please?
Comments
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great poem..x
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But I like it! I want to know the "why" though. Its pretty. and I agree with the maker of the contest you should make it lon ger.
Good job!
anonymousXO -
This is a rather sad take on the prompt I wish it would of been a bit longer but you did a nice job with what you have thank you muchly for taking the time to enter my contest be well
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