yesterday we were walking in the street
but the village has disappeared in a fire rain
leaving us behind
we had dinner that night
but daddy wasn't with us
what has happened?
never again he will ask
"did my beautiful daughter have a nice day?"
he can't
bye bye daddy
i never imagined being left behind like that
Author notes
vietnam war
poem without the letter "o"
A contest entry
- Uh O's by Loki.
700 points, ended August 2, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Vietnam Big Points by BuriedTreasures.
6000 points, ended August 11, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From July 2008 by amaranthine lover.
2800 points, ended November 18, 2008, 37 entries
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Comments
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this is sad, strong and oh so very powerful!
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awww, this is sad... congrats on the h-m!!! have a nice day!!! -slick99
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An interesting write from a Vietnamese child's perspective.
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OMG it made my heart cry oh dear it is so sad. Such a heartfelt and moving piece
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sad is the tragedy
of war. So many hurt and the living live to feel the pain, good write
good luck in the contest
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tragic
to loose a parent in a battle no one won thank you for sharing, good luck
Linda
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oh my gosh, sad topic, great poem. i thought you could give that to mrs otto, but poor woman, she had to read so many of these already, written by you and me. but she can take some more, can't she?
keep on writing - you know the rest
jo
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Thanks for the entry, good luck!
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