Control
lost with the last breath you took
gone with my strength
everything you admired about me
my smile, my laugh, my flavor for life
Lost
in the moment
that I lay with you
in your final week, alone were we
as never before, where we had longed to be
Control
how will I gain it back,
without you here to cheer me on, to guide me?
Fighting for what's left of me
for those who still need me
Yet I still need you...
Author notes
I claim not to have controlled events,
But confess plainly that events have
Controlled me.
-- Abraham Lincoln, US President [1809 - 1865]
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired [Ten Quotes] by Manda Kathryn.
900 points, ended August 2, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats on the Bronze Cup Deena. I am glad you were able to write this pain out. I am here for you if and when you need me. Someday, the hurt will heal and smiles will last longer than the memory of loss.
I LOVE YOU ♥
Renee
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wow, you definitely put this quote into a lovely poem!! very powerful, i liked this alot!! <3 Love, Jordan
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Oh My~
Wonderful piece with lines:
Control
lost with the last breath you took
gone with my strength
Excellent take on the quote prompt
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I love your final stanza, it speaks clear and powerfully!
You have penned a wonderful poem for the quote
♥
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Very well done
I loved it! full of emotion. I could taste the sadness in your words. A truely wonderful write thank you for sharing it with all of us, Boog
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Very heartfelt! I could feel the loss and pain flow through this! Hang in there my friend! Things will get better!
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