I've built a wall around myself.
It has no door, no window, or shelf.
I built it high, too high to see.
To keep you out, a fool I must be.
An eagle stands proud and tall,
Way up on my great big wall.
She sees us both, way down here,
And sheds a single eagle tear.
But still my wall remains.
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I really like this poem, it makes me sad, reminds me of walls in relationships, I'm not sure if you wrote it about that, but I can see how it fits, I thought at first the eagle thing was a bit weird, but at the end, although short it tied it together wonderfully. Thank you for your entry, and good luck, in both mine and the other's contest.
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GRRRRREAT
woooooow that was amazinggg, absolutley amzinggg, it was short, the rhyming was perfect, LOVED how you ended it, but what i like most about your poems is the message behind them, like another poem behind the one we see, you never make it too obvious for the reader to know what your talking about or where your coming from, we have to find out ourselves, and i like that ALOT actually poems with hidden agenda's i love reading into things and finding out new things theres somuch that can be interpreted in many ways...but yeah greatttt write!
keep it up! XX
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whoa really good!
the rhyming was awesome even though i dont usually like rhyme.
"I built it high, too high to see.
To keep you out, a fool I must be."
they are my favorite lines
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