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It just becomes

hollow eyes

on the flip-side

of green

 

almost conversational

there within the tunnel of light

 

from the

strangest

depth

like a slant in her walk

a repeat nitch

in the brain waves

of unfolded experience

 

words are plucked

two at a time

from the darkest of depth

 

thin as tissue paper

flowing like sepia tones

of faded photos

cut from angles

 

vintage secrets washed in brilliance

tightly pressed

between eyes of a dreamer

uncomfortable in descriptions

 

transition of days

fall quietly

unfinished behind heavy eyelids

moments of color

suddenly different

 

a creation of destiny

pinned to silence

it just becomes…

 

 

 

7/31/08 

Author notes

Prompt: Patch of Grass


This is a newly discovered portrait of Van Gogh's
that was long hidden under his painting
"Patch of Grass"

read more here:
http://news.yahoo.com/s/nm/dutch_vangogh_dc;_ylt=Ak1b2JcJd_5kbeagca_vj0TmWMcF

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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 11, 2008
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    Bravo.


  • NeonRose
    August 12, 2008
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    Marvelous! Congratulations on the Silver!


  • Hetha gold member
    August 1, 2008

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    How unique and creative. A wonderful take on the uncovering of the old artist's long held secret. I think a lot of painter's did that though. It was a way of saving on expensive materials, for one, and for another, they were able to start over with their painting with a new and fresh take on the concept they were portraying.

  • ea silver member
    August 1, 2008

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    This write just struck me - a very creative interpretation of the painting. I was fascinated to go back and compare the details you bring in with this. Thank you.


  • apples fell
    July 31, 2008

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  • apples fell
    July 31, 2008
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    This reminds me of my poem, "less devote" that I posted a little while ago. I think it's just in how it's written, not so much what it is written about.
    I don't think anything here struck me as awkward. I really enjoyed the telling nature of the poetry, and how it kind of creeps down the monitor. That third stanza is really quite good. For some reason I thought of someone rinsing dirt off their hands and as they are washing, little parts are getting stuck on the inside of the drain, etc as it spirals downwards. You have a lot of turn of phrasing here and I especially enjoyed how the poem ends. "it just becomes"- Indeed. a lot like most things in time. Admirable work.

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