Wants insist by lingering
Embraced by such a feeling!
Bitter sweet this simple misery
My heart, empty and aching
Tempted by such remembering
Everything, each feeling!
Stirs in me such pain
Again needing
What is past wanting
My heart, my heart is breaking
Never mind it's bleeding
Author notes
Really *~*~*BLAH*~*~* But it was such a fun 1 I had 2 try!
A contest entry
- Uh O's by Loki.
700 points, ended August 2, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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Came Here To Return The Favour
Great little poem - rhymes and flows quite well - congrats on the honourable mention - contest poems are sometimes too hurried I find - but you did okay on this one - would I revise the poem? - probably because all us poets have our own style - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe - dodar dan ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- cheers
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This is perfect, you did more than try!
I read the rules after the poem I thought the poem extraordinary and lovely.
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Thank you for the entry and good luck!
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