Fight the pain
in the rain.
The screams at night
your dreaming you fight.
Unnecessary risks you take
jumping off the cliff into the lake.
Almost dying to hear that velvet voice
him leaving wasn't your first choice.
He left to protect you
all he did was to hurt you.
You sometimes felt like a dork.
But you left the safety of forks
with his sister alice.
Hurting your dad felt like it was full of malice.
You wanted to save his life.
You wanted to be in his life.
When he came back with you
you thought that it was a delusion
and thought that he was goin to say adieu.
For you had believed his blasphemy
when he left you.
Author notes
yeah ok i kno the last few lines dont exactly rhyme srry
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I felt that the rhyming in this poem was a bit forced. There were also a few grammar mistakes. However, I do like the idea of the poem.
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nice write, thanks for the entry =)
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"almost dieing to hear that velvet voice" - dying not dieing. fix grammar!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and capitalize letters that need it, and punuation (sp?).
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haha that was good.
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