I vaguely remember what it feels like to be happy.
Please come back and rescue me.
I'm here in my room, where I can't stop pacing
hiding from my feelings that I don't want to be facing.
I need to pursue
my true feelings for you.
I have a confession that's long overdue,
I still love you.
I thought I was strong,
but I guess I was wrong,
because the thoughts of you aren't erasing
and that is why I am saying
that we were meant to be together all along.
You made me feel like I could fly
across the starry night sky.
Now the thought of you makes me cry,
knowing that you already said good-bye.
My friends said to move on
the night is darkest just before dawn.
But they don't understand,
they haven't faced this firsthand.
Letting you go
just goes to show
how stupid I can be,
will you ever forgive me?
Author notes
I have almost the same poem but a few phrases/words changed to make it feeling pain for a lost love one. its called "I Miss You." this poem though is about the typical situation between teens where they break up but one decides later that they still have feelings for the other.
Missa
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this is great.
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OMG been there felt that. wow you have a great way of showing heartfelt emotions and turning a phrase to make someone think WOW and blow their mind. thank you. keep writing girl I can't wait to see what years of experience will bring to you in the future. you could be amazing. hugz cj
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No need to edit, the poem is great. loved it.
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beautiful
This is an absolutely beautiful poem! I have to give you props cause you captured my heart. My fav part is the endine...
Letting you go
just goes to show
how stupid I can be,
will you ever forgive me?
I know how that feels cause I was stupid enough to let the one I loved go.
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Great write... well done.
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wow what an emotional write. The flow and rhythm of this piece is stunning. you kept the language simple but managed to involve many emotions and didnt go into detail allowing so many people to be able to connect to this piece.
beautiful write.
Thanks for entering
all the best
~Hollow~
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