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Glass Walls

I glance at the mirror,

Look into her eyes.

Why is she broken,

Why is she scared?

She doesn’t know how to,

Break out of this glass that holds her in…….

 

You can speak you can shout !

You’ll break out,

Break out of the walls that seem,

To dampen your screams!

 

I reach in the mirror,

But find myself out,

Into the world now,

Right past those glass walls,

I’m exposing my thoughts,

Surprised I could make it out of there.......

 

[Chorus]

 

The pieces tell

A story.

Your very yell

That broke the walls!

 

[Chorus 3x fading]

Author notes

It's still in the editing process for rhythm and rhymes, but it's gotten better since I first started.

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  • Slick99
    August 28, 2008

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    this is pretty good. i like the title, and the background fits... -slick99


  • Tyiura
    August 13, 2008
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    Very good. Everything matches


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 12, 2008
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    the title and the words are really good


  • Redeemed15
    August 12, 2008
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    I like the title, it is very fitting.