Pretend...that...you...care
immerse yourself in my presence
while you’re brain is in the mindset
of a lover undetected
Never mind that bullshit now
cause you’re with me and
I’ve whispered I love you
in your ear
You run your tongue down my back
as you whisper so sweetly
what I kindly lack
your eyes have run away from mine
and I find that your lips
on my stomach have crossed
the line
as I arch my back, my teeth clenched
against such distress, I’m not fine
you can’t see as your eyes stare into mine?
As my fingers dig into your spine?
As my breaths increase and you
become distant
I find...that I’m no different
consent mixed with pain is just
insignificant
Author notes
I guess most of my poems are kinda depressing. Wrote this awhile ago when I was writing like five poems a day. Never posted it though.
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seems you are in touch with some deeper feelings here and this writing shows you can touch others too... this is really good...PK
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oh... wow. I'm speachless. I don't know whether to compliment you on your excellent writing or apologize for your experience. I am probably inadequate to apologize enough so let me compliment you instead while searching for a way to end any future incidents by and to anyone else.
One Love,
John
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Outstanding! There is so much in this write... pain, and also a sense of strength and control, "consent" deliberately given... the intensity building up to the "insignificant" at the end was great.
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It's always been ..
so obvious to me that you thoughts and emotions are much deeper than what would appear. This piece gives a clear indication of that. However , I don't know that I'd call it depressing though, it's certainly pointed! You've shown again, regardless of the topic, you have a gift for writing and that's not something I'm saying to be nice, it happens to be very true! keep the ink flowing my friend!
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Very Good
This was really interesting and told a good sexual story.
Hope that you have been doing O.K
"BOO"
Love pretty much always comes with a little pain.
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this is sick....cough--cough...lol...loved this feel. depressing, not to me! very expressive is what i say! bravo writer...bravo! loved it!
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Aww damn...i know you were goin through some shit when you wrote this. you left this in my car after you showed me remember? see, once again, i know i have my work cut out for me to protect you from dumb niggas like the one you were stressed out about cause they not worth it.
'You run your tongue down my back
as you whisper so sweetly
what I kindly lack'
like i said, you dont need anyone to verify what you already know. and yeah, your poems are hella depressing, ma, put me in a bad mood and shit. i dont like to think about you bein all sad.
either way, keep writing prettyface, i can dig it. i bet you would be a nice lil spoken word girl. i'll make the beats!
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